Wednesday, 9 May 2012

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Bullets

Jerome woke up feeling the pain in his shoulder, yesterday he fractured it playing rugby with his friends at the park. He walked down to the kitchen to see his mum, he expected her to be making a coffee but she wasn’t there he looked upstairs in her bedroom to see if she was sleeping but she wasn’t there either. He forgot about it thinking she went to work but as he walked outside clutching his shoulder when he saw the bullets, he fell in shock landing on his good shoulder, “who could have done this?” he wept. “Whoever it was I’m going to find them”. Jerome started running not caring about the pain in his shoulder, he was determined to find his mum no matter the cost. First he went to the dairy a couple of blocks away and asked have you seen anyone speeding in a car with tinted windows, he thought a kidnapper would tint his windows so he can’t be seen, “yes I have, one just drove by a couple of minutes ago heading west.” “Thank you,” Jerome said politely and then went on a journey to find his mother’s kidnapper.

To be continued.

By Aiden                                                       

Do you think I should continue?  

2 comments:

  1. I could help you improve it but it would be very good my email is bridget_ireland@hotmail.com if you want to see the start of my book and see if you want my help!

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  2. No, I don't think you should continue, think of another story!



    Danik

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